In the interests of that, I thought I'd share my query letter. Please feel free to crit me. Yes, I know it's a SHORT book. I also know that lengthening it just for the sake of adding 20k words screws up the pacing. And my pacing is AWESOMESAUCE.
And no, the irony of me querying a very short book after querying a very long one isn't lost on me. Ahem. The query.
First, do no harm. It’s an oath Blake Ryan took to become a doctor. Ironic, given that he spent most of his thousand year life sucking souls out of other immortals.
Aleria had changed that. She’d given him mercy when he deserved death, set him straight and let him loose. Even though everyone she cares about wants him to die. He hasn’t let her down yet. Thanks to regular shots of morphine to keep his inner monster at bay, he’s led a quiet life since WWII. His thrills now come from saving lives, not taking them.
Then Aleria’s wheeled into his hospital ward, and his carefully controlled life teeters on the edge of disaster. Her life is vibrant. Basically, crack to immortals like him. And she can’t even remember her name, let alone defend herself. Deserting her when she needs help isn’t an option.
The small problem is, Ryan will have to unleash his inner monster to protect her from those who want her dead.
The nightmare is that his inner monster wants to kill Aleria himself, when the sane part of him is falling for her.
FOREVER is an Adult Urban Fantasy, complete at 41,000 words.
I’m a published author of a YA Epic Fantasy novel under the pseudonym M. Gerrick. (The Vanished Knight, published by Etopia Press.)
There you have (a bit of) what this story's about. Thoughts?