My name is Matthew. Matthew MacNish is the pen name I publish fiction under. You can visit my blog, The QQQE, if you would like to know more.
Misha asked me to write about querying for beginners today, and especially mistakes some beginners make. Before I get into that, let me tell you a bit about myself, and my history with query letters, and point you to some places where I learned about them.
When I first started sending out queries, I had no idea what I was doing. I didn’t know any writers in real life, and I hadn’t met any on the internet yet at the time. So I crafted what I thought was a good query, and sent it out. I got a couple of requests (surely based more on the pages than the query), but I was inevitably rejected. I wasn’t ready. Neither was my query—or my book.
You can read some of my terrible old queries, and see many good examples of the mistake this beginner made, by checking the label “queries-rejections” at my blog.
So I decided to study query letters, and as much as I hated them, I decided I would get good at them. So I started my blog, and began by sharing my own mistakes, so others could learn from them. Then I started finding some great resources for helping to learn how to write a better query. First, was Nathan Bransford’s blog, specifically posts like Query Letter Mad Libs, and Anatomy of a Good Query Letter. Then it was Kate Testerman’s blog, and especially her service Ask Daphne! About My Query. Then I met Elana Johnson, read her e-book From the Query to the Call, and after getting to know her (and the other great hosts) for a while, I won a query contest at Write On Con, which you can read the results of, in which Literary Agent Joanna Stampfel-Volpe critiqued my query, here.
Once I figured out how to write a decent query, I started hosting and analyzing successful ones on my blog. They didn’t have to have earned the author an agent, just a full or partial request. The fun part though, is several of those queries are now published books. You can find a list of those posts, here. Then, once I became familiar with good queries, I started critiquing query letters on my blog.
You can find those posts by checking the label “queries-critiques” on it.
Now that you have some background let’s talk about query mistakes.
First and foremost is the Rhetorical Question. This one is so bad, and so famous, it’s almost an internet meme. Here are some examples of what people think of rhetorical questions in queries:
Tahereh Mafi makes fun of them
The Rejectionist answers some of them
The Query Shark threatens those who use them
Nathan Bransford writes some for classic novels
So yeah, don’t use rhetorical questions. In fact, I would advise you just leave questions out of your query altogether.
The next most common mistake I see is vagueness. Being vague in a query is even worse than being cliché. Well, okay, not always. A really bad cliché could probably ruin a query, but I don’t see that as often as I see people being vague.
When you write a query, get specific. Don’t say character x’s life flipped inside out when her mother came back into her life, show us how it changed, specifically, because even though we can all imagine hundreds of ways in which that kind of incident would change a person’s life, we need to know exactly how it change this character’s life, so that we can begin to picture the world within the story the query letter is describing, and not be left wondering what actually happens.
Not as common, but probably worse, is when a query has no sense of character. I often see people begin with the character’s name, but then just jump right into the inciting incident. You can have an awesome plot, with a perfect inciting incident, but if the reader does know what kind of person your character is, they’re not going to care what happens to them.
I could probably go on, but this post is long enough already, so I’ll leave it to your readers to ask questions in the comments if they have any, Misha.
Thanks for having me on today!
Thanks so much for this great post, Matt! I'm just there will be more than one reader who has been dying to find such a good list of tips and research links as this. I know I have. It was wonderful to have you here.
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Have a great weekend everyone!
Matthew knows his stuff!ReplyDelete
Thanks for having me, Misha! I'm sure some of this is common knowledge to many writers, but hopefully we'll teach someone something new!ReplyDelete
Common knowledge Matt? Not for this gal. Most of what I've learned about query letters if from your blog. Sorry, Query Shark, you've got competition.ReplyDelete
Glad I could help.Delete
Sounds like good advice, Matt. Thanks for the links, too. I'm off to check them out! :)ReplyDelete
It's a good mix of knowledge and entertainment.Delete
Great post, Matt! You know how much I respect the site you've created. Got to love a good query crit!!ReplyDelete
It's funny to think how my hate of queries has evolved into a grudging kind of love.Delete
Nice to know the background on your own query letter, Matt. It's great that you share this knowledge. One of these days, that good karma will catch up to you.ReplyDelete
Oh man. I hope so. Thanks, D.G.!Delete
I agree with DG Hudson above. All this work you do for other people must be racking up one big positive Karma charge, and I hope you reap the benefits of it soon!ReplyDelete
Off to read the posts making fun of rhetorical questions!
The Rejectionist one is especially funny. Enjoy!Delete
Wow, there's some great advice here. I love it!ReplyDelete
Matthew, you are a blessing to us Query Novices. Like D.G Hudson, I too believe that all the good karma you have collected will one day pay off.ReplyDelete
Thanks for an informative post.
Matt has enough character for a dozen queries, and about the dreaded rhetorical question, saw this comment by an agent at Casey's just yesterday: “In terms of pet peeves, I'm not a big fan of query letters that pose too many questions about the work (please just tell me what happens).”ReplyDelete
Well said, and so true.Delete
Matt that's such great advice and I love your blog. Although it does make me cringe about some of the queries I've sent out in the past.ReplyDelete
Great thoughts!!! Thanks for sharing!!))ReplyDelete
Thanks for sharing the sources you learned from, Matt. You do a great job and I'll know where to go when I need help with my query!ReplyDelete
Any time, Nick!Delete
Matt - you've become so good at sculpting queries. I love to hear that you struggled initially like the rest of us.ReplyDelete
Misha - this is a great blog! I'm so glad I stopped by! *new follower*
Go back and read some of those posts, Kimberly. You'll see just how bad I was when I started out.Delete
Thanks for the querying advice. I'm not at that point yet, but I'll have to check out the resources you mentioned.ReplyDelete
There are some excellent resources in there.Delete
Great advice, Matthew! (Especially about the rhetorical questions - lol)ReplyDelete
One great site I've come across is Slush Pile Tales. I love her feature Query Dice - it's been enormously helpful for me to look at what others do wrong (or right).
I've never heard of that one. Thanks, Lauren!Delete
Wow! I wish I'd seen this (and knew about Matt's site) a few months ago when I was on version #536 of my query. But two weeks ago - on my birthday - I finally received a "yes" with a request for my full manuscript.ReplyDelete
Now I'm waiting. And biting my nails. And trying not to check my email every three seconds.
I have three fulls out right now, Cindy, and one of them has been out since January, so be prepared to wait! But still, congratulations!Delete
Matthew ROCKS! I will definitely consult him when I'm ready to query. Until then, I enjoy learning from others experiences.ReplyDelete
terrific advice! i love matthews reviews, so helpful!ReplyDelete
Wow, I think I made ALL of those mistakes in my query :/ Good thing there's your wonderful advice to help us out :)ReplyDelete
LOL. Thanks, Amber.Delete
Wonderful advice and tips here. Good queries are HARD to write.ReplyDelete
They sure are, Carol! I still struggle with them.Delete
I always struggle writing succinct queries - mainly because I try to fit in too much info and I know that's wrong...ReplyDelete
That's true. It's hard to tease and summarize at the same time, without giving too much away.Delete
Great post, Matt! One thing I'd add is to avoid the mistake I made when starting to draft queries - you don't have to be linear! As long as you can summarise the crux of the story, you don't need to cover every major event.ReplyDelete