Sorry I missed yesterday's post.
Just got dragged to the world of Doorways while I reread it from front to back. All in all, I didn't see too many story mistakes, although it might be that perspective thing again.
I took one month off from the book, but the moment I started reading, everything seemed to flood back to me. So if I missed something, I wouldn't be all that surprised.
There are some issues, though. It just feels as if something about Callan's voice isn't 100%. She's tricky to get down, so I need to find a way to go through her part of the story to bring her out.
But that will probably not be the biggest thing.
All through my story, but especially towards the end, I noticed a big issue. I take account of everything, but I don't give the reader enough time for everything to be absorbed.
Everything just clops on and on and on... and... point is, I need pauses. Changes in pace.
The worst is that the problem only becomes obvious while reading chunks at the same time, so changing the small things to fix it is going to be tricky.
I'm going to have to go through the book and go deeper.
But balance will be the most important thing. I don't want to end up slowing the story down completely.
How do you handle pacing?